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This piece is good, deep and insightful. You have interesting word choice. There were some points that didn't make Sence to me. I think that you have great use of colors, but at time it toke away form the story, kinda taking the spot light in its own way. But besides that loved it . Um let's see, there where times that you went a little over broad on the detail. Simplicity in a few places would have really highlighted the ideas better. I get the rainbow but I don't get the car crash, did someone die in a car crash. You really didn't explain that. Over all it was good and gave me knew thing to try out for my writing :3
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